Re: [802SEC] IEEE 802 University Outreach program - draft press release review
Editorial suggestions:
The first sentence is rather unwieldy. I'd break it into two: ... in standards development. IEEE 802 is developing standards that will improve...
That one day's exposure will "engage" students and faculty in standards development is overpromising. "introduce" would be more accurate, but perhaps I'm just being a conservative engineer and the stronger marketing word should stay.
What standards activity do we have that is directed at improving health?
Regards,
Pat
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From: ***** IEEE 802 Executive Committee List ***** [mailto:STDS-802-SEC@ieee.org] On Behalf Of Law, David
Sent: Thursday, May 03, 2012 6:36 AM
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Subject: [802SEC] IEEE 802 University Outreach program - draft press release review
Dear EC members,
The IEEE-SA has prepared a press release to announce the launch of the IEEE 802 University Outreach program and to publicise the IEEE 802 University Outreach day at the July plenary.
Since the development of this press release was at my request I'm seeking EC approval, however before making a motion to seek endorsement I would like to request comments on the draft press release which is attached.
If you can get your comments to me by Wednesday 9th May it would be most appreciated.
Thanks and best regards,
David Law
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