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Re: [802SEC] +++ EC review : a draft 802 submission to the US NTIA before proceeding to a letter ballot (early close expected) +++

Hi colleagues,

I've received inputs from Dorothy on revision 5 of the draft response. 

Revision 6, the latest version, is available at:
https://mentor.ieee.org/802.18/dcn/23/18-23-0041-06-0000-draft-response-to-ntia-s-consultation-on-the-development-of-a-national-spectrum-strategy.pdf

For your convenience, the text changes are highlighted in yellow.

Please kindly let me know if you have any (further) comments or suggestions.  As mentioned, a letter ballot (with early close) may be open tomorrow (Tuesday, 11 April 2023).

Regards,
Edward




On Sun, Apr 9, 2023 at 4:35 PM Edward Au <edward.ks.au@gmail.com> wrote:
Hi Roger,

Revision 5 of the draft response is available at:
https://mentor.ieee.org/802.18/dcn/23/18-23-0041-05-0000-draft-response-to-ntia-s-consultation-on-the-development-of-a-national-spectrum-strategy.pdf

When compared with revision 4
- I've accepted all of your edits and strikethroughs.
- I've replaced IEEE 802.15.6 and IEEE 802.15.16 with IEEE P802.15.6ma and IEEE P802.15.16t, respectively
- In line with Ben's suggested texts on your comment related to "foreseeable", the sentences are updated as "In a similar fashion, broadcast Target Wake Time specified in IEEE Std 802.11ax-2021 [8] and marketed under Wi-Fi CERTIFIED 6 Release 2 [14], uses scheduling functions to improve throughput through coordinated transmissions. TWT can also improve energy efficiency by allowing the use of a power down state when idling is possible without harming the service [13]. MLO will enable more adaptable, energy-efficient and robust IEEE 802.11 connectivity than ever before."

Regards,
Edward

On Fri, Apr 7, 2023 at 6:08 PM Benjamin Rolfe <ben@blindcreek.com> wrote:
Reommend accepting Roger's editorial changes.  To Roger's question on "foreseeable" on page 5, 1st paragraph, I have a suggestion:  Break it up and restructure thus:
...uses scheduling functions to improve throughput through coordinated transmissions.  TWT can also contribute to improve energy efficiency by allowing use of a power-down state when idling without harming the service quality [13]. 

Fixes grammar, addresses the question, and is I think what was meant.  

For the last sentence I further recommend we change thus: 
MLO will enable more adaptable, energy-efficient and robust 802.11 connectivity than ever before.

This answers the "compared to what" question and is IMO defendable.  There are other means to achieve "connectivity" via other standards and technologies that will consumer far less energy than 802.11 with MLO but not at the data rates and characteristics of 802.11.  

FWIW
Ben
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Subject: Re: [802SEC] +++ EC review : a draft 802 submission to the US NTIA before proceeding to a letter ballot (early close expected) +++
 
Edward,

Here are some issues I identified in a quick review.

Cheers,

Roger
On Apr 7, 2023, 11:47 AM -0600, Edward Au <edward.ks.au@gmail.com>, wrote:
Dear EC members,

I would like to request the review of the following draft IEEE 802 submissions by Monday, 10 April 2023 A.O.E, before proceeding to a letter ballot (with early close expected) tentatively next Tuesday (11 April 2023).

Through a collective effort from a few 802.18 members who are active in IEEE 802.11 and 802.15, a draft IEEE 802 submission was prepared for the US National Telecommunications and Information Administration (NTIA)'s consultation, namely "Development of a National Spectrum Strategy".  

Link to the draft:
https://mentor.ieee.org/802.18/dcn/23/18-23-0041-04-0000-draft-response-to-ntia-s-consultation-on-the-development-of-a-national-spectrum-strategy.pdf

Reference:
https://ntia.gov/issues/national-spectrum-strategy/request-comments

Thanks and Regards,
Edward

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