Re: [802SEC] Draft Press Release for review - IEEE 802.11 WG Extremely High Throughput Study Group and Real Time Applications Topic Interest Group formation
Dorothy,
I recommend the following:
a) 1st paragraph 1st sentence simplify to: "IEEE today announced the formation of..."
b) 2nd paragraph 2nd sentence: replace "researching industry need" with "identifying requirements"
"The group is identifying requirements for a possible amendment..."
c) 4th paragraph 1st sentence: replace "investigating" with "quantifying"
"...quantifying performance lags and stability issues..."
Regards,
--Paul
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Subject: [802SEC] Draft Press Release for review - IEEE 802.11 WG Extremely High Throughput Study Group and Real Time Applications Topic Interest Group formation
Dear EC members,
Please review the attached draft press release and provide any comments to me by Monday, September 17, 2018.
An email approval motion will follow comment resolution, as applicable.
The draft press release has been developed in coordination with IEEE marketing and communications staff, and
is related to formation of the IEEE 802.11 Extremely High Throughput (EHT) Study Group and the Real Time Applications (RTA) Topic Interest Group.
Thanks,
Dorothy
IEEE 802.11 WG Chair
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Dorothy Stanley
Hewlett Packard Enterprise
dorothy.stanley@hpe.com
+1 630-363-1389
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