[802SEC] Response to Comments on 15.7 PAR mods
EC Colleagues-
https://mentor.ieee.org/802.15/dcn/11/15-11-0260-00-0007-disposition-of-comments-on-revised-p802-15-7-par.doc
contains the responses to the comments received on P802.15.7 PAR. The
content of this document is as follows:
From 802.11:
Comment:
8.1 Add item numbers
Disposition:
Agree. Section 8.1 now is, "5.2 (Scope): Change [verb tense] to match
Scope in draft, and remove word "any" in last sentence. 5.4 (Purpose):
change [verb tense] to match Purpose in draft. 2.1 (Title): delete
redundant "Standard" and simplify title."
From James Gilb:
Comment:
Section 2.1: In the title, the word Standard is used twice. I would
suggest the title of: "Standard for Physical (PHY) Layer and Medium Access
Control (MAC) Layer for Short-Range Wireless Optical Communication using
Visible Light"
or an even simpler one:
"Standard for Short-Range Wireless Optical Communication using Visible Light"
Disposition:
Principle: Changed title to the simpler one as suggested by commenter.
From James Gilb:
Comment:
Section 5.1: A suggestion: Although I agree with the change in tense in
the last sentence, I think it would be best to simply delete it as it would
be difficult to show that it adheres to any of the many eye safety
regulations. Also, we need to be careful with any claims of safety in a
standard.
Disposition:
Principle: The word "any" has been deleted as a resolution to another
comment, but the sentence has been retained.
From James Gilb:
Comment:
Section 5.4: An editorial suggestion: In the rest of the standard, a
acronym when spelled out is not capitalized unless it is a proper name or
occurs in a location in which the word would be capitalized anyway. Hence,
I suggest changing "Radio Frequency" to be "radio frequency"
Also make this change to "radio frequency" in section 5.5.
Disposition:
Agree: We will let IEEE staff make any such trivial changes.
From James Gilb:
Comment:
Section 5.5: Editorial suggestions: More mistakes in capitalization,
change to "location based services", "point-to-multipoint", and
"intelligent transportation systems"
Disposition:
Agree: We will let IEEE staff make any such trivial changes.
From Ted Olsen (NesCom member)
Comment:
In 5.2, scope, I suggest that "adheres to any applicable" in the last
sentence be changed to "adheres to applicable".
Disposition:
Agree
Please let me know if you have any questions
Regards
Bob H
Bob Heile, Ph.D
Chairman, ZigBee Alliance
Chair, IEEE 802.15 Working Group on Wireless Personal Area Networks
Co-Chair IEEE P2030 Task Force 3 on Smartgrid Communications
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