Re: [802SEC] 802.11 Press release- incorporating comments received thus far
Bruce votes approve
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From: ***** IEEE 802 Executive Committee List ***** [mailto:STDS-802-SEC@ieee.org] On Behalf Of Bruce Kraemer
Sent: Friday, September 03, 2010 9:07 AM
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Subject: 802.11 Press release- incorporating comments received thus far
Pat, Geoff, Tony, Apurva, Mat
Thanks for all the review and the great wording suggestions. Renee and I were able to roll in all but one of them without conflict.
(I wonder why my response to you looks remarkably similar to a technical ballot comment resolution?)
Press release r2 is attached in response to comments received.
I hope this addresses any objections of those who have delayed their vote until seeing these resolutions.
Bruce
Tony, Pat, Geoff & Mat suggested rewording the 2nd paragraph.
Pat & Geoff suggested using "a primary" as a qualifier. "Wired Ethernet is quite wide spread too - especially since you have included "the office"." I think modifying the claim to "a primary" takes some of the teeth out of it. How do you feel about making it "..become the primary means to wirelessly access..?"
BTW, the original statement was motivated by Vint Cerf as captured in the IEEE One Voice video <http://www.ieee.org/portal/ieeetv/viewer.html?progId=107881> . Vint's statement: "Anyone who ever uses a wireless WiFi system to get access to the Internet is making use of an IEEE standard or if you're using an Ethernet cable. Anyone who uses the Internet is making use of an IEEE standard;"
Agree. Changed the core paragraph to:
"802.11 standards have evolved to become a primary means to access the Internet in the office, at home, airports, hotels, restaurants, trains and even aircraft. Today's laptops, PDAs and mobile phones are typically equipped with an 802.11 radio. 802.11 standards have enabled a whole range of new applications and economy for wireless communication. The standards serve as the underpinning for ubiquitous reach of wireless communications networks for entire industries."
Apurva's request to add to the "About 802". Agree. Changed in r2.
Apurva's request to add to the "About 802" section of the press release is correct. I guess this indicates how often people actually read the boiler plate. Change was also approved by Karen McCabe.
Pat's suggestion on 3rd paragraph quote grammar. Agree. Removed "have proven to"
Pat's suggestion on changing 4th paragraph "requirement" to "requirements". Agree. Changed.
Pat's input on the 1st paragraph math. Disagree numbers and math were carefully chosen, leave as is.
Pat's input on the 1st paragraph - Pat's math stating "600 Mb/s is a 300 times increase over the original 2 Mb/s data rate, not 600 times,"
however, we didn't use 2 Mb/s as the original data rate in the release. Vic, Stuart and I were very careful to establish the reference point as 1MBps and used the term ">1MBPS goal" in order to make all subsequent calculations easy to understand/compute. We discussed for some time that this press release is not intended to catch the attention (or ire) of the engineers that write the standards but rather the press and general public. The more you know about the technology the harder it is to write text to please the engineering psyche. This release was intended for a lees knowledgeable audience.
I'd suggest we retain the calculations as is. I would also note that we made a few other compromises regarding numbers; the TGac project currently has MCS running up to 7.7Gbps I rounded it off to >5 for the same reasons of simplicity in writing for public consumption.
Pat's suggestion to further format time line. Agree. Reformatted
We had not intended this to be a detailed recital of events and there were dozens we considered and then dropped for fear of making the text too long. Some of the "events" are more "trends" that took long period s of time and were supposed to be indicated as spanning a decade.
Geoff made several additional suggestions:
Agree. Changed the paragraph.
The start of the 3rd paragraph, was changed to read: "The standards produced by the IEEE 802.11 working group have provided untethered, low cost, high rate data communications..."
Agree. Deleted the bullet item:
"During the first decade of this century, further aspects of evolution commenced including management and the ability to generate report information from the air interface."
...should either be dropped completely (aspects too obscure for the general public) or completely reworked to remove the gobbeldy-speak in favor of plain English. I am of the opinion that it is too obtuse to make it through translation into the foreign press and too clumsy to survive the cross-out pen of a good editor.
Agree. Changed:
"802.11ac task group will essentially extend 802.11n capabilities in the 5 GHz spectrum"
To: "802.11ac task group will extend 802.11n - like capabilities into the 5 GHz spectrum"
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