Re: [802SEC] 802.11 Press release- incorporating comments received thus far
Bruce -
With regard to the first change, ""802.11 standards have evolved to become a
primary means to access the Internet in the office,...", I think that you
could improve on this somewhat, and remove the slight contradiction of
implying that there are multiple primary means, by saying:
"802.11 standards have evolved to become the primary means of wireless
access to the Internet in the office,..."
Regards,
Tony
On 3 September 2010 17:06, Bruce Kraemer <bkraemer@marvell.com> wrote:
> Pat, Geoff, Tony, Apurva, Mat
> Thanks for all the review and the great wording suggestions. Renee and I
> were able to roll in all but one of them without conflict.
> (I wonder why my response to you looks remarkably similar to a technical
> ballot comment resolution?)
>
> Press release r2 is attached in response to comments received.
> I hope this addresses any objections of those who have delayed their vote
> until seeing these resolutions.
> Bruce
>
>
> Tony, Pat, Geoff & Mat suggested rewording the 2nd paragraph.
> Pat & Geoff suggested using "a primary" as a qualifier. "Wired Ethernet is
> quite wide spread too - especially since you have included "the office"." I
> think modifying the claim to "a primary" takes some of the teeth out of it.
> How do you feel about making it "..become the primary means to wirelessly
> access..?"
>
> BTW, the original statement was motivated by Vint Cerf as captured in the
> IEEE One Voice video <
> http://www.ieee.org/portal/ieeetv/viewer.html?progId=107881> . Vint's
> statement: "Anyone who ever uses a wireless WiFi system to get access to the
> Internet is making use of an IEEE standard or if you're using an Ethernet
> cable. Anyone who uses the Internet is making use of an IEEE standard;"
>
> Agree. Changed the core paragraph to:
> "802.11 standards have evolved to become a primary means to access the
> Internet in the office, at home, airports, hotels, restaurants, trains and
> even aircraft. Today's laptops, PDAs and mobile phones are typically
> equipped with an 802.11 radio. 802.11 standards have enabled a whole range
> of new applications and economy for wireless communication. The standards
> serve as the underpinning for ubiquitous reach of wireless communications
> networks for entire industries."
>
>
> Apurva's request to add to the "About 802". Agree. Changed in r2.
>
> Apurva's request to add to the "About 802" section of the press release is
> correct. I guess this indicates how often people actually read the boiler
> plate. Change was also approved by Karen McCabe.
>
> Pat's suggestion on 3rd paragraph quote grammar. Agree. Removed "have
> proven to"
>
> Pat's suggestion on changing 4th paragraph "requirement" to "requirements".
> Agree. Changed.
>
> Pat's input on the 1st paragraph math. Disagree numbers and math were
> carefully chosen, leave as is.
> Pat's input on the 1st paragraph - Pat's math stating "600 Mb/s is a 300
> times increase over the original 2 Mb/s data rate, not 600 times,"
> however, we didn't use 2 Mb/s as the original data rate in the release.
> Vic, Stuart and I were very careful to establish the reference point as
> 1MBps and used the term ">1MBPS goal" in order to make all subsequent
> calculations easy to understand/compute. We discussed for some time that
> this press release is not intended to catch the attention (or ire) of the
> engineers that write the standards but rather the press and general public.
> The more you know about the technology the harder it is to write text to
> please the engineering psyche. This release was intended for a lees
> knowledgeable audience.
> I'd suggest we retain the calculations as is. I would also note that we
> made a few other compromises regarding numbers; the TGac project currently
> has MCS running up to 7.7Gbps I rounded it off to >5 for the same reasons
> of simplicity in writing for public consumption.
>
> Pat's suggestion to further format time line. Agree. Reformatted
> We had not intended this to be a detailed recital of events and there were
> dozens we considered and then dropped for fear of making the text too long.
> Some of the "events" are more "trends" that took long period s of time and
> were supposed to be indicated as spanning a decade.
>
>
> Geoff made several additional suggestions:
>
> Agree. Changed the paragraph.
> The start of the 3rd paragraph, was changed to read: "The standards
> produced by the IEEE 802.11 working group have provided untethered, low
> cost, high rate data communications..."
>
> Agree. Deleted the bullet item:
> "During the first decade of this century, further aspects of evolution
> commenced including management and the ability to generate report
> information from the air interface."
> ...should either be dropped completely (aspects too obscure for the general
> public) or completely reworked to remove the gobbeldy-speak in favor of
> plain English. I am of the opinion that it is too obtuse to make it through
> translation into the foreign press and too clumsy to survive the cross-out
> pen of a good editor.
>
> Agree. Changed:
> "802.11ac task group will essentially extend 802.11n capabilities in the 5
> GHz spectrum"
> To: "802.11ac task group will extend 802.11n - like capabilities into
> the 5 GHz spectrum"
>
>
>
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